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All right yes i writing shmoop er's Last sentence in

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this section for you the senate cannot pass a bill

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without majority approval That's it all right so we're going

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to rewrite this thing unless a majority of senators approve

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a bill comma Well then what Schoolhouse rock may have

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taught us how a bill becomes a law but it

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didn't teach us a cz much about revising sentences by

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adding subordinated in conjunctions want want yet number schoolhouse rock

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rocking and a rolling get bennett and over the write

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out a different song there's maybe i'm just the builder

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I'm just a bill tonight i will stop thinking of

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the senses to pay more attention in maintaining logic within

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the rewritten sentence than too closely match the wards of

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the original sentence right All rights while the rewritten sends

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mentions a bill in the introductory claws we'll just replace

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the words a bill with a pronoun it so that

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we're not talking about two different bills you know like

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clinton and cosby or something So what D it will

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not pass that's the right answer Unless a majority of

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senators approve a bill it will not pass that's it

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We don't want to pete a bill in the remaining

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part of the sentence which will be both were done

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in repetitive saying the same thing again and again again

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and confusing so just get rid of a b and

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c it will not pass i'm just a schmuck I'm 00:01:27.549 --> [endTime] only issue

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