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Okay i say t writing nine of eleven Here we

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go in paintings of old people in the revolution our

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daughter's considering removing a following sense into this And we

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kept or delete it All right Sentences right here We're

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going to find it in the writing there So let's

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make vertical features you got with red on their image

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Gentlemen we're going to recover That goes with you everywhere

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you go everyone cataclysmic black leaving that such people publicly

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Their exhibition of this small painting now owned by the

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gale university art gallery was instrumental in securing fourth sixty

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one year old artist a condition to create one no

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meetings with u s capitol rotunda This paragraph as well

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as the next deals with the creation of the painting

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it's distracting to bring in information about other paintings when

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the paragraph focuses in detail on a particular one So

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come on give this painting is fifteen minutes of fame

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There are plenty of fax The essay mentions only one

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so that alone isn't reason enough to delete the sentence

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So yeah get rid of the focus of the essay

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is the history of the painting The information moves chronologically

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So it doesn't make sense to bring up the paintings

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current location this point So get rid of a there

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It's also not an appropriate place to start A discussion

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of is important as an artist like Where does that

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come like way out of the blue Just get rid

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of it That's keeping doesn't relate to the subject matter 00:01:09.558 --> [endTime] It's Not enough so bye bye

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