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ACT English: Style Drill 2, Problem 1. What's the best way to make this sentence more concise?
ACT English: Style Drill 2, Problem 5. How would you correct the underlined portion if at all?
ACT English: Style Drill 2, Problem 4. Which choice is the most concise way to properly write the sentence?
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ACT English: Style Drill 2, Problem 4. Which choice is the most concise way to properly write the sentence?
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Here's your Shmoop du jour, brought to you by autobiographies. It's still incredible
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to us that these books write themselves...
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How would you correct the underlined portion below, if at all?
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Jordan wrote and authored an autobiography of his life, even though he was only ten.?
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We're eliminating choice (A) right from the get-go; this first sentence is crammed with
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redundancies.
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If we wrote something, we authored it; if we authored something, we wrote it. Plain
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and simple.
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Choice (C) also uses both "wrote" and "authored," so we'll get rid of that one too.
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The original sentence also modifies the noun "autobiography" with the prepositional phrase
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"of his life."
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This is redundant because every autobiography is the story of someone's life.
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We see the same mistake in choice (D), so we'll eliminate it as well.
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Choice (B) is correct because it eliminates both redundancies from the original sentence
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by concisely stating, "Jordan wrote an autobiography, even though he was only ten."
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But he didn't have
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to cover as many years as most memoirists...
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