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Thank you We sneak in and here's your shmoop du

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jour brought to you by the oil spill solutions when

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all is lost start drilling for water california right Checking

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the following passage everyday citizens can help the environment We're

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looking for the words hear people saying building with carbon

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honey wants to revise sentence six in the second paragraph

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to make it clearer What's the most effective way for

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her to do this And here the potential answers All

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right well first we'll take a look that original sentence

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also the more we drive the more pollution we produce

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plus bigger cars used more gasoline which means more carbon

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dioxide Uh it's definitely needs to be revived Well d

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doesn't help tiny out all that much mainly because the

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phrase especially in big cars isn't essentials and sense though

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it oughta be surrounded by commons note to self if

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wherever surrounded by commoners Well don't look him in the

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eye Try c is just playing on The main issue

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is that the phrase by us makes this sentence some

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kind of passage And as we always say we're gonna

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write about big cars producing carbon dioxide You've really got

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to give it our all he has the same problem

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that c plus more We've got the phrase by us

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again which helps take the sentence into passive land widely

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known as the most boring place on earth Also the

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phrase and more frequently feel super awkward popping up in

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the middle of a sentence like choice A beats all

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the competition This option packs in all the same information

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of the original sentence but does it more concisely top

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of that it's way more active See how in this

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version the subject is while flipping the sentence around in

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this way means no by us is necessary Incidentally if

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we've hooked sentence totally around read it backwards well cast 00:01:42.416 --> [endTime] a magic spell Don't try this at home

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