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PSAT 1.1 Writing Diagnostic. How should the underlined portion be changed in the passage, if at all?
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PSAT 1.11 Writing Diagnostic. How would you change the underlined portion, if at all?
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PSAT 1.23 Writing Diagnostic. Which choice most effectively combines the two sentences at the underlined portion?
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by zip guns a tool for really lazy people who
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can't be bothered to fasten their pants I check out
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the passage right here as white phone outside yemen flooring
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the handheld and bring it on the way All right
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which choice most effectively combined the two sentences at the
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underlined portion And here the potential answers All right lot
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of moods Okay so we've got this white fella firing
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oxygen out of a device that moves him around while
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in space so he's basically like wally with that fire
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extinguisher pixar didn't have a patent on that move or
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a white might be hearing from the lawyers Alright so
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the most important words in this question our most effectively
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In other words more than one answer choice might make
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sense or be technically correct but we're looking for the
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one that gets across all necessary information while not being
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too verbose or word or long winded or loquacious or
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redundant saying the same thing over and over and over
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again like that sense often a suffers from the redundancy
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issue A moos were also onboard gem and i ate
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ten and eleven but only the crew of gem and
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i ten actually used the device They were not used
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on gemini eight or eleven Well yet if h h
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m youse were on all three ships but they were
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only used on gemenon ten then we really don't need
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to write or to tell us they weren't used on
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the other two We're smart little boys and girls we
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can put you into together here though There's probably a
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better choice in the mix How about option c h
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h m youse were also onboard Jim and i ate
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ten eleven and on ly the crew of jim and
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i ten actually used the device this one's short into
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the point but and isn't really the best transition here
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between the two points Writers trying to express a conflict
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between the ideas that there were hh mm used on
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all three shifts but they were only used on one
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of them but seems like a much more fitting conjunction
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to use in this instance we should maybe keep that
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in mind Let's take a look at d h h
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m youse were also onboard gemini eight ten and eleven
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But on ly the crew of gemini ten actually used
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the device and not the other two crews Hey check
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out these but now now don't do that This one
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is using a more appropriate transition between the phrases but
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it has the same problems Option a and then it
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doesn't really have to reiterate that the other two crews
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were keeping their zip gunnery to a minimum Maybe they
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had other ways to get around which means the correct
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answer is b h h m Youse were also onboard
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Gemini eight ten and eleven But only the crew of
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gemma night ten actually used the device that uses a
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conjunction that indicates a conflict between two ideas and doesn't
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repeat itself like our grandmother when she starts talking about 00:02:45.723 --> [endTime] all the suitors she had when she was younger
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