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Okay See th s Spyros were on seven of twelve

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and a noun down to paragraph three right at first

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right there So let's skin down to it A whole

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bunch of stuff about james meredith our hero here getting

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into college Finally after try try trying again Alright now

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paragraph three The governor of mississippi right At first i

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tried to block meritus enrollment at ole miss but he

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eventually agreed to allow meredith to register our governor mississippi

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right at first Well clearly whoever wrote this did not

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attend to find ole miss university Well the author is

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trying to say that the governor first tried to block

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meritus enrollment but then reluctantly agree Agreed to allow him

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to register nothing grammatically wrong with right at first But

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it's certainly not winning any points for style or sophistication

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Get too many words and propositions to make the most

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effective choice and just sounds Jargon e like a bad

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writing for style points go for the choice that shortened

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sweet initially effectively communicates with one word What the other

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choices tried to communicate and three or four so should

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read The governor of mississippi initially tried to block emeritus

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enrollment Yada yada But that's it Yes Just just just

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just

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